I bthink that man and boy are just states of mind a man can have characteristics of a boy and a boy can have characteristics of a man. a boy wants to be free and have fun and a man is serious and feels obliged to be a leader. I also think a mans love is subjective an a boys is objective.
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Jamie ITs a goods poem
i have a few pieces of feedback for you
1: Try and space the lines out... spacing
2:Spell think right...bthink=think
3:I think you could add in a couple more lines/sentences
4: you state "a boy wants to be free," but a boy is free
5: you say "a man is serious," which is true but you could add... and a man wants to be free
ESSERY
jamie,
i like what you have done to describe it but i dont really see it as a poem yet.
its more of a description/paragraph
try to make it into more of a poem
its good tho
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